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she always liked poetic boys, the ones that talk in riddles. it’s plain and
simple why she liked him. he was like a scattered puzzle waiting to be put
together. she always wanted to be the one who would collect the pieces
and make him whole again.

and while she was busy seeing stars, he would be busy trying to find his
pulse. he could never find it, and sometimes it worried him. it worried him
that he could never find the proof that he was really there.

often he would put his hands on her heart and it would beatbeatbeat. he
would take such comfort in knowing that at least one of them was alive.

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“i don’t have a heart.” he confessed, laying on white bed sheets.

“you do, i can hear it.” she replied, laying her head on his bare chest. at
the time, he wasn't sure whether he should have believed her or not, but
he so badly wanted to.

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he once told her that he was scared that when he dies, no one would
remember him and he wouldn’t be missed. he once told her that he felt
like he wasn’t living his own life, he felt like he was looking at someone
else’s life through a series of photographs.

he use to tell her to make a wish whenever the clock turned to 11:11 but
the truth is, back then she had nothing to wish for. now since he left, when
the clock turns to 11:11 she wishes for him to come back even though she
knows he never will it just makes things easier.
:iconthe-chemical-factory:

Author's Comments

this is the product of a bunch of old poems
that were all mushed together.. tada.
it's shitty.

prosetry? enjoy?

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:iconvindicta38:
It almost feels like I'm reading about myself. :XD:

Love it though, nice work. :)

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Words do my bidding! ....... Sometimes...
:iconnicholasaveciks:
I think the line about the photographs is a little out of place. If you were to just have the line read "he just felt he was looking at someone else's," it would be more powerful. Though that might screw the format up, having that little "else's" act as an annoying tail to the rectangular stanzas.

I liked this poem a lot though. It, at first glance, might seem like a teenage melodrama, but there is something quaint and innocent about it. The connection between the two is solemn, and it shows in how you describe them, how he was always elsewhere in his mind, and she was always there for him.

Very nice.

--
Where does the truth lie?

Alternatively, a quote from Bender:

\"What\'s that?! A wolf!? Er some kind of boogin\'?\"
:iconunbiased--opinion:
I love this. :heart: The concepts are so pretty. It's not shitty at all! :XD:

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Together we are one,
yet alone you are two.
Because the world is overpopulated, you know.


:music: And if it comes to the rain,
just be glad you'll smile again.
'Cause so many don't, and so many go unnamed. :music:
:iconohsostarryeyed:
i'm going to run the risk of sounding strange and telling you that you are reading some prettily-worded version of my life right now.
i love this, thank you. :heart:

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i like to
put haikus where they
don't belong.
:iconwordcut-outs:
Strangest thing. Just started reading it. It's 11:11


:heart:

--
It’s a bit hard to love me when you’re dead.
:iconwordcut-outs:
And now that I have read it, I love love it.

I wish at 11:11 all the time for something along lines.

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It’s a bit hard to love me when you’re dead.
:icondeathdoll-decay-x:
I can REALLY relate to that.
pretty poetry too, m'dear.
:iconwhitetiger7865:
This is SOOOOO sad!!! :cries:
But its an amazing piece of literature

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"If i had to choose between loving you, and breathing, I would use my last breath to say I LOVE YOU."
:iconmaidenofwar:
not shitty at all... i love this. especially the first verse <3

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"Never sit and wait for death... Never waste a single breath..."
:iconthe-chemical-factory:
haha.
thank you (:

i wish on 11:11 too.

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i'll move to paris,
shoot some heroin
and fuck with the stars.

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