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lanky with long dark hair; i thought he was the most beautiful thing in the world and even though he denied it, i knew he was just being modest. sometimes i would let him stick his hands up my shirt and touch my ribs. he'd slide his long fingers up and down each one, reminding me of how thin i am. i often forget.

i liked it when he touched me, but that was short lived and it was already too late to tell him to stop. it was like he didn't understand the meaning of the word "no" but i could forgive it because the mistakes he made were so honest.

"what would you do if i died?" he asked.
"i would be sad," was all i said and he looked disappointed.

today his hair is short and his eyes show a change. today i realized that he is the type of boy that all the teenage girls write about and it makes me feel pathetic in more ways than one.

he's been my inspiration for too long and it's time for me to move on because he's gone.
he's been gone for a long time.
though most of my pieces are personal, this one is more so.
i may post more personal pieces yet.
i feel like you guys don't know me well enough.




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:icondeeptheatrics:
deeptheatrics Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011
You are such a fantastic writer.
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011  Student Writer
thank you !

ps. i love your icon,
what happened to lani garver was a great book.
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:icondeeptheatrics:
deeptheatrics Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2011
I've been on deviantart for years and you're only the second person who's made the connection! I loved it too
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011  Student Writer
yeah, sadly the book isn't as well known as it should be.
<3
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Catastrophobia Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i can relate to this..so much that it almost scares me.
i love it.
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Student Writer
thank you <3
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tanjorstr Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2011
If you scrap this, I will be less happy. I don't really care if you have another muse now, because I don't think muses are necessary. However, this is good writing. It is... delicate, I think. It's not a thing that I can do, and I like it a lot.

-Tanner
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011  Student Writer
thank you very much (:
it's not to be scrapped, don't worry.
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tanjorstr Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011
Comforting :)
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YouInventedMe Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2010   Writer
but i could forgive it because the mistakes he made were so honest.

splendid
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2010  Student Writer
:heart:
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maidenofwar Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010
i've had the same muse since I was like 15. and then I decided they should stop being my muse and I just don't write anymore.

i think this is written beautifully... like you've taken on a new tone in your poetry, like words are just flowing and flowing. you're an amazing writer <3
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2010  Student Writer
oh that's sad D:

thank you so much!
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:iconmaidenofwar:
maidenofwar Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010
haha... a little, but sometimes you just have to force yourself to move on?

and you're very, very welcome :D
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2010  Student Writer
true.

<3
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2010  Student Writer
<3
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velocity07 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010
please don't scrap this. it's beautiful. <3
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2010  Student Writer
thank you <3
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:iconvelocity07:
velocity07 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2010
no problem. xd
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:icongoldeyedgirl:
GoldEyedGirl Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010   Writer
reminds me of someone i knew..
i love how you capted the emotion, beautiful
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Student Writer
thanks !
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xDamagedRose08x Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I bet plenty of girls could relate to this. Thanks for submitting it. Wonderfully written.
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2010  Student Writer
thank you !
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WanderingHere Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2010
the ending couldn't be more perfect.

i love this.
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2010  Student Writer
thank you <3
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:iconwanderinghere:
WanderingHere Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2010
you're welcome<3
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mirror--opposite Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Student
is this the sad love story we talked about?
it's pretty.
i'm so glad you're writing again. :]
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Student Writer
one of them.
thank you <3
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mirror--opposite Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2010  Student
:heart:
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MarinaMichaelis Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010
OH MY...this is absolutely brilliant!amazing...words can't really describe how much I like your writing!
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Student Writer
thank you !
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JacksonEatsApples Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
This is lovely, to have a muse, or even to have had a muse would be a wonderful thing.
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Student Writer
thank you :heart:
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AVolatileCalm Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010
I truly adore the honesty in your writing.

Your topics may (or may not) change, but don't give up your soul. It's wonderful
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the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Student Writer
thank you <3
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ToxicAlice92 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Professional Photographer
Please don't scrap it. =/ I love it. I have a boy just like this, who's asked me that, and only think of everything with him when it's quiet, too, and this just made me think about a few things. This is really good, and you just helped out one person with it for sure, and I don't doubt at all it's helped others or will in the future. :) Please leave it up. :heart:
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the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2010  Student Writer
aw, thank you <3
i probably will.
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softsilhouettes Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010   General Artist
wow this is like, an experience i once had with a boy... somewhat identical, somewhat not.

these parts,

"lanky with long dark hair; i thought he was the most beautiful thing in the world and even though he denied it, i knew he was just being modest. sometimes i would let him slide his bony hands up my shirt and touch my ribs. he'd slide his fingers up and down each one, reminding me of how thin i am. i often forget. i liked it when he touched me,

i still dream about him a lot and
i miss him, but only when it's quiet."


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i miss your writing
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the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Student Writer
yeah :c
missing him is an awful feeling.


aw :heart:
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losingmyfaith Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Student Writer
awww :huggle:
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Student Writer
<3
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loverz116 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010
i truly don't know you well enough just like
you don't know me well enough either. :]
and that's okay. this piece is simple, sad,
& sweet.
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:iconthe-chemical-factory:
the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Student Writer
thank you (:
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loverz116 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010
you welcome :]
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TheTerrorOfTheDeep Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010
Lovely things are overrated. So are truthful things, but this is the sort of piece that makes it understandable how truthful things got to be that way. Because it's so good.
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the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Student Writer
:heart:
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Talkerwolf Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Student Writer
This really got to me. Don't scrap it, it's a brilliant piece of writing.
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the-chemical-factory Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010  Student Writer
thank youu <3
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