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lucy by ~the-chemical-factory:iconthe-chemical-factory:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


i.

we waste through time and rhythm;
my lit cigarette is a fiery canvas –
your fiery canvas.

ii.

you’re satan in a yellow sundress and
fireworks don’t explode in the bedroom like they use to.
©2009 ~the-chemical-factory
:iconthe-chemical-factory:

Author's Comments

i wanted to write about a girl.
usually i don't write short poetry,
but i wrote this and was having a hard time adding on.
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=Vindicta38 Jul 15, 2009, 12:38:06 PM

you’re satan in a yellow sundress and
fireworks don’t explode in the bedroom like they use to

I like it. :nod:

--
Words do my bidding! ....... Sometimes...
:iconitsxmagik:
~ItsxMagik Jul 15, 2009, 2:11:25 PM
Ahh. This is freakin' brilliant.
you’re satan in a yellow sundress and
fireworks don’t explode in the bedroom like they use to.
Seriously, I'd :+fav: it just for that part, but the whole thing is amazing.
:love:

--
make a map of what you see; direct pain effectively.
:iconpickled-poppy:
=Pickled-Poppy Jul 15, 2009, 2:55:15 PM
That ending is so killer!
As a poem it's a delight <3

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I like the words Smashing, Golly, Gosh, Corking,Cracking and Soliloquy.
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:iconloudmoth123:
~loudmoth123 Jul 15, 2009, 3:24:31 PM
this poem has a certian something
that makes me breathless.
beautiful.

--
do you, do you want to learn to fly?
:iconthe-chemical-factory:
~the-chemical-factory Jul 15, 2009, 5:08:13 PM
thanks <3

--

my boy builds coffins he makes them all day
but it's not just for work and it isn't for play
he's made one for himself, one for me too
one of these days he'll make one for you
:iconthe-chemical-factory:
~the-chemical-factory Jul 15, 2009, 5:08:20 PM
thanks (:

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my boy builds coffins he makes them all day
but it's not just for work and it isn't for play
he's made one for himself, one for me too
one of these days he'll make one for you
:iconthe-chemical-factory:
~the-chemical-factory Jul 15, 2009, 5:08:31 PM
thank you ! (:

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my boy builds coffins he makes them all day
but it's not just for work and it isn't for play
he's made one for himself, one for me too
one of these days he'll make one for you
:iconthe-chemical-factory:
~the-chemical-factory Jul 15, 2009, 5:08:37 PM
:heart: (:

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my boy builds coffins he makes them all day
but it's not just for work and it isn't for play
he's made one for himself, one for me too
one of these days he'll make one for you
:iconzekidear:
~Zekidear Jul 15, 2009, 6:07:05 PM

And just then a gas tank exploded in flames while I was reading this.

It's very pretty. (:

--

"No More Sunshine"

it was raining that night.
the night the paramedics stopped.
stopped for a second. stopped for a minute.
just stopped.
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